Can you write a worse opening paragraph than this? "Your cheeks are looking alarmingly flushed, Christine
her mother remarked, setting her embroidery down in her lap the better to observe her daughter. "And your eyes are very bright. I hope you are not coming down with a fever."
Christine laughed. "I have been at the vicarage, playing with the children", she explained. "Alexander wanted to play cricket, but after a few minutes it became clear that Marianne could not catch a ball and Robin could not hit one."
How do these people get published???
Go on, write a worse one, you know you want to....
that is NOT bad. It's really common to start with dialogue.
*kt*
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